by The Prince
There's some great imagery in here my friend, some awesome flow that you've got consistently flowing throughout. It's quite dark too, and it allowed the poem to read better, because it suited the atmosphere. The only thing I suggest that in the last stanza, there is a lot of 'she'. |
by Ingrid
Hi Grant, |
by Cara
What a fabulous response to Porcys challenge :] |
by Sylvia
Dark and scary. You must have ESP, I have been thinking about Black Widow Spiders this past week. Your images are right on about this creature. In a way it is a love poem in that the male will do anything for this female even if the end result is death. Excellent job. 5/5 |
by Ben
Great job on the poem. I enjoyed the point of view you had on the spider. Nice job, mate. 5/5 |