Dreamscape

Wow, wonderful write full of emotion that lies deep within. The overall flow and structure was almost flawless, I think with some punctuation it would've been perfect. Punctuation is very important in poetry, it lets the reader know when to pause or stop as well as adding to the overall flow.

Overall a wonderful heartfelt write, keep up the fantastic work!

Peace, Joe

THAT My Friend, is as good as it gets !!!
( The topic of which you write )
And you have captured it PERFECTLY....
Or should I say Expressed instead ,?5/5 Jim

"I lay and watch you sleep at night
Jealous of the shadowed light"

. . these lines are my favorite, simplifies how
indeed you are inlove that even a non-human made you jealous.

"Your gentle breath a sweet perfume
To challenge the breeze within the room
I move up close to hear the sound
Of the quiescent, peace you've found"

. . .a very wonderful and lovely stanza, the flow flowed flawless and the rhyme glide well too.

"I'll join you in your dreams tonight
Maybe search for the rainbows light
Together running you and I
In fields of dreams, where lovers lie"

. . . the conclusion decided it, leaving your readers an impression on how you manage to master establishing love poems.

Great Work!
K n' SD

Another love poem. I too am glad you are writing more. We get the benefit of very good poems from you. Nothing better that to watch your true love sleep and that special bond that happens. Excellent work. 5/5

Wow Grant, i love the flow of poetry thats coming from you lately! Its great :]

This was such a beautiful peace, it makes me feel so content, to know that there is pure love like this out there. I love how you open it.. watching your loved one sleep, i just think thats the picture of love. Its gorgeous.

The whole piece was beautiful, it felt very unforced and the simple structure and wording made it feel all the more sincere.

Perfect :]
5/5