Comments : In My Place

  • 15 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    From the very beginning of the poem, I was captured. Something about the bitterness behind your words, and the sting of blame the reader can feel. You made this very easy to relate to, without taking away how personal it really is.

    The only thing I found with this poem is that you started off so strong that by the very last two lines, the emotion isn't quite as strong. I don't know, maybe it's just me and the way I read it, but to me it felt off. Everything else was flawless, though.

    5.5

  • 15 years ago

    by Good Enough

    With this poem it seems like ur being hurt and u would rather "cradle" ur pain.

    Thinking of you,
    too good to be true.
    Just go, live your life:
    I'll cradle this knife.

    this seems like u want him there but ur pushing this person away and tht u could make the pain of them leaving be easier to deal with wen u use another pain.

    i can totally relate to this poem its really good. the flow is good but some lines dont flow the right way. like ther missing a syllable or something but other than tht really good :D