I love the first stanza as it makes the reader - well it makes me - really think about what is going on in the bigger picture. It also makes the reader want to read on.

I felt that the rhyming was not pushed, but it very effortless which makes it easier to read and understand.

now it brings her pain
with tears every day
^ I feel that these lines need to be changed to,
Now it brings her tears,
With pain every day.
I'm not saying you have to do it, it's just a suggestion from my point of view.

I also think you need to check your grammer on this poem - I know mine isn't great but it would make it easier to read.<-- that isn't meant to sound rude so I hope it doesn't.!
Other wise a great read and I can't wait to read more from you! =]

-Natalia.