by Twisted Mind Broken Soul Feb 26, 2009
category :
Miscellaneous /
Misc. poems
I wish I could go back, |
Even though you state that this was a five minute right, I got the feeling that it wasn't completed. I think you could have expanded more on it. I did like it though; your rhymes were a little off in the first and last stanza, but overall, I thought it was well-written. I would like to see it added to, however. |