Comments : Surrounded

  • 15 years ago

    by Jenna Rose Kat

    Aww this is really cute. I think there should be another line in the last stanza, but really its great, good job :)

  • 15 years ago

    by Starlight

    Great job, this was a unique piece keep up the
    good work.

  • 15 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Interesting write, short, but not too short. To the point and well written, the flow was okay, could've been better by adding more punctuation. Punctuation is very important in poetry, it lets the reader know when to pause or stop as well as adding to the overall flow.

    Overall a short poem that is to the point, well written. Keep up the good work.

    Peace, Joe

  • 13 years ago

    by Jenna Bella Oldridge

    A short write but still your poem managed to say alot.

    "It sometimes releases me,
    from lonesome captivity.
    It sometimes devours me,
    like the wildest animal"

    ^ the above is my favorite part I really liked the way you worded it.

    5/5