With Her, I Can See (Song)

What a sad love song. It is so unfair to lose one we hold close to our heart. It would be neat to hear this to music. Nice job on this Joe.

Reading this poem makes me want to swoon and dance alike. I like your ability to bring sadness and joy to bear at the same time. I've always believed a truly great piece of work should make you smile and want to cry before you finish it. I hope you continue to pour your creativity into such wonderful works! 5/5.

The first time I read this, I overlooked the fact that it's a song. After I realized it was, I read it again and enjoyed it much more. I think it's a very heartfelt elaboration of love and all the emotions that go along with it. I really like the love story theme, but am also grateful that it isn't the cliche type that gets old.

I definitely appreciate your word choice and the whole structure of this piece. Nicely done. 5/5.

-Rolo

A lovely song. I love how you don't want the burning image to die off, because thats all you have of this person. and no one never wants that kinda thing [memory] to die with in them and i personally i don't think it will ever die. I wish I knew the beat of this song though but other than that, amazing job.

keep it up.
keep on writing.
love always and forever.

This is like one of those song lyric that we hear that we know could stand alone without the music, but the universal language of the music is still highly appreciated. As I know you still appreciated having known such beauty in a concrete sense. This poem is a heart song that transcends even abstract emotion to the point we know that the subject did with acceptance of thing we can’t change. All who had the honor of direct communication with the angel you write about can appreciate the sentiment and deeper meaning of this masterpiece.

Thanks for sharing