by azii Mar 2, 2009
category :
Love, romance /
lasting love
- here is where i'd rather be. girl i love you so |
The poem seemed to repeat itself quite abit, which made much of the emotion get drawn out of it, making it seem like another bland love-gone-wrong poem. I enjoyed the dialogue parts of it, and i actually believe you should have done the entire poem this way. The switching to normal stanzas seems to make it faulter and boring. Peace and prosperity, |
Sorry i accendently submitted this comment before I proof read |
- "here is where i'd rather be. girl i love you so |