Little white turtle dove

Well what a wonderful collab the both of u did here. The imaginary the both of u presented here was superb. I can really visualize all the scene.Both ur words just melts into 1, i couldn't really tell whose line was whose.

Excellent Job to the both of u
5/5

"In the twilight time a little white turtle dove skims the lake
While the setting sun kisses her wings with hues of tangerine"
`You use a wide variety of adjective to describe this dove that is skimming the lake, simple adjectives that are easy to understand and paint a vivid image in the readers mind.
`Twilight time was a great alliteration, I love when people take the extra step to incorporate an alliteration, similie, metaphor, or even personification into their poetry.

"She flies high upon the breeze and dives in sheer delight
Feeling so happy and content on her magical dusky flight"
`Awh, this is so beautiful. It's just soo peaceful and uplifting.. the beauty of nature is such an amazing site.

"At the brim of the lake a little shadow enters the scene
Drawing closer he catches her eye, little dove turns shy"
`I will be honest with you, I didnt like how words were repeated.. there were words in stanza one that ended up reappearing quite in a bit in this stanza. Ill give you some examples, and perhaps you could replace them with something different: lake, little (X2), dove.. synoymns are fun to use at times like these when youre running out of words.. it eliminates the repetition so that your poem flows more smooth.

"Trying to get in sync with her moves, he comes closer still
As they fly together a full moon rises and night brings a chill"
`This was adorable, two doves meeting together and flying gracefully together.

"His heart flutters feeling the wind from her fragile wings
She flies high in the sky, he follows along closely behind"
`This is easy to imagine, nonetheless.. You and Gabriel both did very well on the description.

"White streak flash through clouds higher from the ground
Beautiful acrobats in the sky gliding low over the town"
`I loved the word acrobats used.. if you stop and think for a moment.. thats a great synoymn for doves, or birds, or whatever for that matter.

"Landing on the branch of a willow, they sit side by side
He begins to coo moving closer with feathery courage"
`It's almost like sweet love.. this was so adorable you two. :]

"She returns his advances sweetly singing under his wing
Joyous sounds fill the ear like the beginning of spring"
`Loved it! I do think you both tend to overuse words like [his, her, ect.] pronouns, yet I understand that point of view in this poem and how its hard to avoid those, yet I'm sure you could find a way to delete a few so its not so full of those words.

Well done by the both of you though.
A piece full of imagery.

5/5.

Little white turtle dove in love brings smiles to me. Good job with this collab. It does blend but I noticed that the 3rd and 4th lines rhyme in each verse which is somewhat unusual. Good job to both. 5/5

This was a lovely poem written very sweetly, the whole poem had a quiet peacefull feel about it, so all in all a lovely poem by the both of you.
Well done

Grant