by Sweet Disposition Mar 4, 2009
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
All it took was a look |
by JaM
I have to agree with Bradley Peter on this one. It was okay, lacking that first grab until further in, then it picked up nicely to the end. To me it makes the poem even short because the real part of the poem is at the end and a very little taste is given in this one. Nevertheless, it was good. |
Great imagery flowed through the poem....very vivid....loved the rhyming as well....good write...keep it up. |
by Chris
This is a nice poem. Sorry I suck at leaving comments but i think your good. ;) |
Very cool poem.. loved it |
I didn't think much of this poem, until it started closing towards the end, and you spoke about swords and crowns. It was from there to the end that the piece really shined, for me. Those last eight lines, were, in my opinion, better that all the lines before. Perhaps you could extend those lines and create a new piece. The last four lines in particular, I admired. They had a sense of greatness. |