The Collapse of Sunset [Haiku]

You require The as the first word to make it a true Haiku.
Five The/sun/set/coll/apsed
Seven While/a/ban/don/ing/the/sky
Five Bring/ing/stars/to/ease
I think that is right 5/7/5 count Your Haiku will then conform and I love the vivid picture it paints of the end of the day 4.5-5/5 RayS

I thought the same thing as Joe when I first read it, I was trying to say collapsed as 3 syllables......

I love the poem though, it is beautiful. Good word choice and imagery.

An Haiku is supposed to have a syllable count of 5,7,5 however yours has a syllable count of 4,7,5. Other than that small detail, this is a well written piece of poetry.

Peace, Joe

Beautiful read Mel. I love the imagery created. The sun falls and another beauty fills the sky.

Wonderfully penned Haiku

Luanne

Ooooo..really nice. I liked the opening lines &
I also like the image this Haiku has painted. Enjoyed the read!