Afflictions

I noticed there was no punctuation whatsoever. That ruined the flow for me immediatley. The stanzas felt kinda weird when they went from 6 lines to 3..That made it akward too. I did like the rhyming and your word choice. I loved the idea behind the poem, and it was well penned.

I read the poem through twice before writing any comments.

I must say, I like the poem overall. It was unique and contained alot of "umph" for lack of a better word. The words used were very powerful and they flowed together very well.

I thought in the first two stanzas that; while the words fit together, the lines didnt. When I read it out loud and paused at the end of each line before moving on, it sounded odd. But if I read the lines 1 and 2, 3 and 4, and 5 and 6 out loud without the breaks, it sounded more natural. Maybe its just me being picky, but it was just a little off key; like playing a piano thats slightly out of tune.

On a positive note, I love the overall meaning and the word choice was superb. It sounded like an old proverb to me.

Good job. It was different and strongly writen.

Well i like how you display this poem of walking among those who do not believe in the almighty.Well we don't really need to see the Lord physically to believe, all we need is a little faith.

Worthy are wise convictions
The only healthy addictions
are free of all afflictions

I like how you end off this poem. from my interpretation, It is only when you believe in Him, then you're free from your misery

Excellent Job
5/5

That is very good advice I will edit