Deanna I really like this one and the reality behind it...how sad that much of our youth is lost to the streets...what potential is never realized...

I like the repetition at the beginning and end...I can't really pick a favorite part as I like it all! 5/5

Deana such a sad piece woven by your own tears I imagine. It is so sad that this is really the life many teenagers will have and few will escape.

Little boy blue
with sagging jeans
Your eyes tell the story
of the violence you've seen
^^^
You have seen those eyes many times my friend and I know you have helped many see brighter days. If only there were more people like you Deana ...

It is sad that these little eyes have seen more hurt and pain in a few short years than many have seen in a lifetime.

A great read Deana ... I know your heart is behind these words.

Touching !!!!!!

This is just so sad, Deana....and I know it is true for so many youngsters out there!

You have penned it perfectly:)

Hugs,

5/5 Ingrid

Deanna,

Wonderful read, dear friend. How true those words are. It really saddens me.

"Your eyes tell the story
of the violence you've seen"

This is the saddest part yet. There is no escaping it at all. If not in the streets, in the news, in the books they read, even in the music they listen to. A truly sad world we live in today. You have taken a very simplistic form and wove such depth into every line.

Awesome job here as usual.

Always,
Jeannie

I am so glad you finally posted this one. I love it. You have such an awesome talent for being able to see exactly what these poor youth go through. I know you work very closely in the field and its your hard work and dedication to these young people that can turn their lives around. Great work on this and I would expect nothing less.

Take Care,
Kay

I like how this goes straight to the point, delivering powerful message in realistic tone. Sad, so heartfelt piece. There are too many teens with 'the street' as their future.

The repetition of the first line at the end added great effect to the poem.

Great write.

I like how you infuse the boy's story in the poem. It can feel dysfuctional background that he came from, having a mother whose an addict feeding on the money which he earns from the streets.I'm sure there are lots of kids out there with the same kind of parents...though it's sad that this kind of things happen in reality we can only hope that they turned out well.I really enjoyed this poem and flow juz slips off right from the tongue smoothly. Keep it up

Excellent Job
5/5

Surely this was inspired from the harsh reality you see at work. Nice rhythm and rhyme in this sad little piece.