by Jenn
Wonderfly written! |
I like your work you know what the world is like and know how to keep safe good work keep it up. |
Ah gosh, this almost made me cry. I love the emotion that is conveyed from reading about these two lovers who have lost each other. Despite the fact the second stanza is so short, I feel like a whole story is told throughout it. |
by The Prince
No need for a long comment or criticsm here because quite frankly, I thought it was beautifiully penned, saddening, and had an excellent ending. Thanks for putting this up, you're very talented. |
by SashaMirage
Once again your words are very captivating and takes the mind of the reader. It was very proffesional and had that old poetic feel to it as I read. The opening lines were very expressive and I the title was an eye catcher. Great Write! 5.5 |
An all right poem, not overtly good. The idea has been done many times before. I think you should have expanded on it, increase reader interest. Also, I do not like how you decide what we think are the "dramatic" lines with the "----" It just takes away from the poem. |