by Chelsey Mar 10, 2009
category :
Sadness, depression /
grieving, loss
Beautiful, she is |
by ReBecca
I got chills. Very beautiful. Flow and rhyming were perfect. Content was touching. I enjoyed reading this. |
by Nee
I loved the idea of the poem. |
While I like the basis of your write and the way you draw us in and tell us about her life, the flow needs a bit of work for me, it seems very stiff. Removing some of the filler would help, watch your syllable count. |