The content of this piece was okay, and for the majority of the piece, so was the flow and the rhymes, but there were points where the structure was heavily broken, like towards the end where the a line was very short, and then the line after that was extremely long. And there were points where the rhymes were weak, if non-existent, like ‘was’ and ‘does’ or ‘not’ and ‘taught’. I think the content was by far the best aspect of this piece, with my favourite line being ‘The colors are there the pictures in the frame’. I’m not sure why, it just sounded nice.

Brad