Comments : The Weeping Harlequin

  • 15 years ago

    by Armada the Gestalt

    Hmm, very interesting. Like your concept, and the rythm flows neatly; the single exception is the ending line. Perhaps replace 'take interest' with 'nobody cares for'? It'd just flow better, no need to heed me.

    But yes, very fluid. The first verse is the best, definitely, but the whole thing's pleasant, theme, execution, etc.

    Keep goin' - Schem.