She's addictive, like a pill

by SheFlowsThroughMyVeinsLikePosion   Mar 11, 2009


Your in my dreams
Your on my mind
a girl like you
is hard to find

Your name runs through my head
and stays there for the day
I wonder how your so perfect
and i pray that you will stay

For the first time in my life
I'm ready to give you my all
I'm giving you forever
Please don't let me fall

here is my heart
take care of it for me
You said you'll love me forever
Lets show them what we can be

they don't think it will last
but baby i think it will
your the first girl I've loved like this
its addictive, like a pill.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Faithless

    Nicely writtenly. I like that your poem is written in a semi confessional manner. You're penned it down in a simple yet easy for the the readers to understand.

    Though there is just one think that i find it weird or incorrect:

    I wont how your so perfect
    and i pray that you will stay

    -I think here u meant 'I wonder how you're so perfect' or 'I won't show you're so perfect'
    yeah juz work on that part cause it doesn't really make sense

    But other than that, overall you've done a
    great job on the poem

    5/5

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