Nitin....this was such a special collab...Thank you for giving me insperation to write again....you make me feel with you by myside I can conquer anything...I could never have been Blessed with a better friend then you yaar....I hope we continue to write together for many years to come.....Thank you for always being there when I need someone....You will always have that special place in my heart.
I love you!
~Hugs~
Cindy

This is a beautiful love poem describing the ways someone's love makes you feel. Good write from both of you. 5/5

Nitin,

The serenade (which I don't believe there is a more perfect or fitting title)was such a beautiful and inspirational write between you and Cindy. It is great to know the kind of friendship that exists between you and her is pure. As I mentioned in Cindys comment that I absolutely adore this stanza.......

Your Strength embraces me
Like a Majestic Mountaintop
Your quietly in the distance
Pure love lifting me up

This stanza alone says so much about the strength you offer. Though miles away and can not be seen by the eye, the strength will always be. Wonderful job on the collab dear. Great write.

Kay

Wonderful work you two!

Nice to see you two meshing styles again. My only suggestion is to remove the capital letters here:

^Your "S"trength embraces me
Like a "M"ajestic "M"ountaintop ^

^To shine on the "W"orlds beauty ^

I love how you added end of eternity..great job!

You guys are great with your collabs. Love the beginning and the ending.

Best wishes...

Outstanding, smooth fluid and beautiful. 5/5 great job

Nitin..I truly missed your writings =)
I loved this piece, although again, the rhyme needed to be much more powerful.
Very well done
Write on.

This is a sweet poem:

'Your heart is like an island
I wish to have discovered before
Your voice is like an ocean
Where I never want to find the shore'

The imagery and similes used here are easy to comprehend and quite fitting to the poem's tone. I do think the word 'where' is a bit misplaced here. I don't think you need it.

'Your heart beat is the music
That soothes me to sleep
Your bright smile in the memories
I will forever keep'

Very romantic and sweet. The idea of a heartbeat (being just a continuous drone) putting someone to sleep is quite interesting, I got an image of a couple holding each other tight, and her head pressed against his chest.

'Your breaths are like a breeze
Spreading love all around
Your dreams could embrace the sky
Without lifting a foot from the ground '

I think 'your breath is like a breeze' would be nicer, but I adored the last couplet, the flow was spot on and is perhaps the best moment in the poem. Excellent.

'Your Strength embraces me
Like a Majestic Mountaintop
You're quietly in the distance
Pure love lifting me up '

I admire the consistency you have here. The alliteration was nice and again, it's another well penned stanza. Nothing much critical to say other than 'quietly' seems off, as an adverb.

'Your eyes are deep enough
To look in, till the end of eternity
Your faith is strong enough
To shine on the Worlds beauty '

Flow was a bit off in the second line but I liked the idea of the eyes almost being bottomless, always finding solace there, always finding something new. Brilliant.

'Your laughter is my serenade
Brings me smiles when I grieve
You're my trusted tree of life
To whom I'll always cleave'

Fantastic ending, really admired this poem's consistency and well chosen lexis. Brilliant collaboration (although I couldn't tell it was one) because it flowed so well.

Good work!