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by The Prince
This was a nice poem, although I thought it would be better in the love poems section since it's about love? Your flow was off on the last line of the first stanza. And you might want to revise: 'or said anything not nice' It doesn't really make any grammatical sense. 'you laughed with tender joy and love because that's what you made me do and even when it wasn't that funny you found a way to make my face blue' How does somebody laugh with tender love? I liked the last two, quite imaginative. The rest of the poem was pretty nice with some good highlights. Just be careful of flow and grammar.