Comments : The Storm

  • 15 years ago

    by xToBeWithYoux

    Oh my, this is an amazing piece! So vivid, and descriptive, I love it! 5/5 from me, this is great :)

    Keep writing,
    Emily :)

  • 15 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    "The magic of lightning
    fills the evening sky,
    illuminating beauty below."
    `Such a simply worded few lines, yet youve portrayed a vivid image through your words.. well done. :]

    "Teardrops from mourning angels
    pour down from the coulds,
    replenishing the dying Earth."
    `I adored this! It was an alternate way of saying that its coming from above, heaven, like they are teardrops from angels.. gosh that's amazing Krista!.. I love the word replenishing too, really adds meaning!

    "Clouds file into their place,
    releasing their loud, bellowing
    screams of thunderous cries."
    `I'm completely and utterly blown away, I love the word choice.. it just is so powerful and amazing.. youre describing a storm amazingly and its perfectly written. I love the "bellowing screams" .. what a unique way of describing thunder.

    "The rain will keep falling,
    thunder will keep echoing,
    lightning continue flashing."
    `I love the repetition of "ing"

    "Storms run throughout
    the dark purple sky
    in a single minute."
    `Although thunderstorms can be threatening, youve painted a beautiful vivid image in my mind, the dark purple sky..soooo gorgeous! I can imagine the lightning flashing and producing purple and other colors in the sky.

    "If only life on Earth
    were this easy to
    replenish and illuminate."
    `I love it, a way to reitterate, and emphasize your idea.. repetition was used in a great way here..

    Well done!

    5/5.

  • 15 years ago

    by Sourav

    Very good lines actually... Liked it!
    Good description and nice imagery. Nice to read.

  • 15 years ago

    by Ingrid

    It felt like I was standing next to you, holding your hand and watching the storm together.

    Great work, girlie..I truly enjoyed this one!

    *hugs*

    5/5 Ingrid