We sometimes think things will be better in another place and don't realize that what we had was actually the best and then it is too late. Good story. 5/5

Really great story Ingrid! First off, the imagery was overwhelming, every line created a scene and you gave such unique and descriptive images. The message was a good one, and it came out in the end, nice job. 5/5 from me, take care and this was a huge pleasure to read! God Bless.

~MaryAnne

"Their branches like huge arms trying to grab her on her flight"
`Powerful line.. it made me stop and read it over again because I really loved the way that you put this simile into your poem here.

I must comment and say your word choice is fabulous, it really adds to the suspense of the poem.. I'm just about on the edge of my seat wondering what will happen next.. youve definatly caputred the readers attention thats for sure.. and now I dont want to stop reading..

Also from the word choice as well as dialouge we get a tint of sadness as well, quite a sad story.. I'm glad to see another Children poem on this site.. you really dont get to see them that often.

"Into the open field she wandered as the sun lit her milk white face"
`I love this line.. its so descriptive and well written although simply said.

Interesting write.. again like I said we dont get this gift of being able to read children poems that often on this site.. so when the opportunity comes that there is one I'm always excited to read it.

A detailed, and well written story with pure emotion.

Well done.
5/5.

'The grass is always greener on the other side?', are the words filling my head after reading your poem.
Sometimes, that is not the case, and your delightful story set into a rhyming poem, illustrates this very well. I was enchanted by your poem, wondering what would happen to the little girl at the end!
Nice write Ingrid! Job well done.