Excellent work with the form and the words you have written. I like the use of questions. "Will you still love me tomorrow" is a question that we ask ourselves as we age and always hope the answer will be yes. Good job. 5/5

Raj,

Seemingly effortless yet beautiful and classy. What a wonderful job you have done with this write. I love the questions you posed as well. Such talent you have and a flair for writing about the common things without sounding cliche. Beautiful Job dear.

Beautiful write. i enjoyed it. 5/5

Raj
How beautiful. Your talent is shining in this piece.

Years welcome with wrinkled embrace,
blossoms have withered, shrinking grace,
from destiny, smiles I borrow,
and watch them shimmer in your eyes,
moment enclosing for goodbyes,

As years pass us by and age creeps in. We start to prepare to move in to a different place. The saddest part is leaving the one we love behind.

will your heart then drown in sorrow?
Uncertainty clouds, dream sublime,
with unceasing rhythm of time,
Will you still love me tomorrow?

That kind of love never dies. You did a awesome job on this form! Your imagery and word choices are great.
Love Cindy

Excellent word choice in this beautifully penned piece. Great job adhering to the rules of the form. Good flow and rhythm. ~~claps~~ Wonderful!

Years welcome with wrinkled embrace,
blossoms have withered, shrinking grace,
from destiny, smiles I borrow,
and watch them shimmer in your eyes,
moment enclosing for goodbyes

Wonderful lines. It did a very good job on writing such a form with so much flow and rhyme. Enjoyed it!

A beautiful write. so pure, so deep. i loved every word. i also loved the way you went about writing this piece. you have a creative mind.

from destiny, smiles I borrow,
and watch them shimmer in your eyes,

i don't think i've ever heard lines like that. very lovely, absolutley beautiful. such emotions were expressed in this poem and you did a wonderful job at doing that. 5/5.

-Ashlei.

I like the form and I also like the message that lies within. Have to try this form one of
these days..A sentimental write..take care.

Beautiful poem dear, as always you amaze me with your selection of words and unique way of expressing. Great write indeed

all the best and take care

Excellent work:

'Years welcome with wrinkled embrace,'

'Wrinkled' gives me an image of age, and the echo of that first word 'years' seem to connote the idea of lasting? Lovely word use.

'blossoms have withered, shrinking grace,'

The rhyme was so subtle. It's great when you can read a poem and not predict the rhyme. Usually it's predictable but you made it fit completely. Also fitting syllables like that was good work too. I'm glad you said withered instead of wilted. :)

'from destiny, smiles I borrow,
and watch them shimmer in your eyes,'

I'm starting to love this form, it sounds so beautiful when read. Or that could just be your words doing that, but I found it incredibly easy to read. I love this bit, it's sentimental. 'Shimmer in your eyes' could have been cliche but it wasn't, good work fitting that in.

'moment enclosing for goodbyes,
will your heart then drown in sorrow?'

I thought these two lines fitted in with the poem but if it was in any other form or if your poem wasn't do forgivably beautiful then it would be cliche.

'Uncertainty clouds, dream sublime,
with unceasing rhythm of time,
Will you still love me tomorrow?'

I might attempt this form myself! Brilliant ending! I liked how the title appeared at the end but I found myself predicting it to be in the next line, which took the punch out of it a bit. It's only minor though and I thought this was a beautiful poem, worthy of praise.

Well done on a lovely write!

Wonderfully written!
I think you mastered Nove Otto!

10/5 =]
Keep Writing!

Wow, now that is excellent. I definitely couldn't get away with writing in a style like that, but you did it. And that last line is absolutely amazing. Very well done. This is a definite 5/5.

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