Bravo first off. You have a way with words. And so elegantly portraying each rhyme with a rhythm. I can practically hear a tenor. Some bass and the blues singing songs of life. A masterpiece indeed. Sometimes cities hold so much freedom. You described the shoes and the leather jackets. I presume this is not in the modern day era. Or perhaps it is. |
For the limited 50 words you did an amazing job! You brought the average city into a beautiful image! Great poem like many of yours! Keep it up! |
by Spirit
I love the images that worked their way into my head as I read this poem. The things you described remind me of new york and makes me want to go back as soon a possible. |
by Jenni Marie
"Graffiti walls and makeup dolls |
by deadly sun
Great poem, created a perfect picture in my head while at the same time the way nothing was to detailed allowed my mind to wander on its own path. |
by ether
I don't really have much to say on this one, other than I don't think I could have explained the city as well as you have here. You included nearly everything that is found in a city in such a simple and poetic way. |