This pen

Again another incredible poem...

Nice write, however there is no puncuation at all, with some punctuation, I feel this peice can mend together nicer and flow better. Overall I felt it was okay, you need to work on the structure I felt as well, I don't think 2 lined stanzas/verses did this poem justice. Also, you didn't capitalize very much, capitalization is needed to distiguish the begining of sentences and words you are trying to emphisis.

Below I will revamp your write into a way in which I feel it will give more emotion and a better read all together:

It's hard to deny
what's inside,
but it's something
that I must hide.

A deep void
that is empty,
this pen writes
with such empathy;

It has told tales
of pain and sorrow,
of children,
who don't know about tomorrow.

Of a heart,
that has been lost and broken,
that's been repaired and sewen.

Of death,
of those close to me,
of the pain that you can see.

It's told tales,
of things I've never seen
or of things I remember
from my dreams.

This pen has told a story
from beginning to end,
but the sad thing is
it will tell them all again...

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overall a nice write mate, keep up the good work.

Peace, Joe

Ah, the pen is mightier than the sword! (pun intended) It's amazing how the poet can turn in anything into something completely different. The poem is very good, I believe in all that you've said here.

5/5
Wishmaster

It seemed kinda forced in some places, otherwise I liked it :-)

It seemed kinda forced in some places, otherwise I liked it :-)