Comments : The Colors

  • 15 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    This is a really strong poem, with such emotion. nice work. keep it up. Shanik

  • 15 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "My skin is kind of sort of brownish
    Pinkish yellowish white
    My eyes are grayish bluish green
    But I'm told they look orange at night"

    Good descriptions to show the reader visuals and bring them into this piece.

    "My hair is reddish blondish brown
    But it's silver when I'm wet
    And all the colors I am inside
    Have not been invented yet"

    Excellent rhyming and wording, keep writing on.

    "My tumor is kind of sort of gray
    Blackish brownish or red
    My hair is blondish light and thin
    But I'm told it's going dead"

    Very meaningful and deep words you have written here.

    "My spirit's color has not changed
    I don't think i need a vet
    And all the colors I am inside
    Have not been invented"

    The rhyming was off here but I loved how you described your eye color, hair color then you say your spirit's color has not changed. Very brilliantly expressed and written. Just one thing, the "i" needs to be capitalized, just proper grammar. Otherwise nice work, tons of emotions and really touched my heart.

    4/5 from me, keep writing, always and forever.

    God Bless You And Take Care!

  • 15 years ago

    by Joyce Duboise

    Very unique.

  • 14 years ago

    by WakingFreedom

    Deep write. I love the color description and all. I like the lines;
    "My spirit's color has not changed
    I don't think i need a vet
    And all the colors I am inside
    Have not been invented yet"
    Just rich with emotion and such beauty.

  • 13 years ago

    by Jess

    I love all of your poetry.
    the ones i read anyways.
    :))
    this poem in by far my favorite though.
    I dont know why, it just is.
    dont stop writing, you have some real potential.

    And it would be greatly appriciated if you could comment and rate one of my poems.
    thanks love!

    -jesss.