Lovely poem. love the diction you chose and the way you organized your thoughts to put this poem together. also the tittle is perfect for this poem..it is understood by the reader easily even if they don't know the back ground. i do so it makes it more touching to the heart. any way hun keep it up

Ada
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Wowzers i really this poem...... keep writing

My gosh this poem is amazing. How I missed it when I was reading all your work I don't know, but I love this. Your emotion is so clear and your voice is shown, the audience gets glimpses at your thoughts, and beautiful imagery too. You have penned a piece of perfection, I hope many more people find this piece like I did cause it really is that good. It was long but I was intrigued completely.

Don't be clear, paint the mirrors black,
Hurt me dear, always turn your back
Your fault now, broken doubtful dreams
Don't ask how, lovely silent screams

^Such an enticing start, really grabbed me and pulled me in, ready to read more.

Stepping stones poke through the water
Leading to a tree in the center of a lake
I wish to sit atop the tree away from slaughter
That has left a small piece of me in it's wake

^ Here is the best bit of the scenery's imagery. I can actually see it and feel what you described.

Don't save me from the ones I love
Don't say that I am so above
When all I wish is to be below;
I'm sorry for what happened long ago

^This is where we learn some about you in particular and get a peek at your true self.

Maybe I'll meet the lady of the stones
Whose face I remember in desperate oath
Life and death are lovely tones
But it hurts to know I can't have them both

^Beautiful ending. It wrapped everything up very nicely. There is imagery, detail, and emotion in these four little wonderful lines.

Excellent piece
5/5

My gosh this is terrific. I am speechless with how amazing it is.

Fantastic! You have a way of structuring your thoughts which has a unique approach. You engage the reader deeply into a moment of raw emotions. Such sadness conveyed beautifully, lovely i must say. Blessings... :)

Amazing Poem