by Normal is the Watchword Mar 18, 2009
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
Based on a true story |
by Hollymariee
This is really powerful .. Having been cheated on , it really hit home . I understand what you mean when you talk about helping my poems with emotion .. Because your wording litterally makes my stomach twist and provoques alot of emotion . The half rhymes are barely even noticeable because they flow so nice .. These lyrics sound like something that would be sung by The Red Jumpsuit Apparatus .. I dunno , it reminds me of Face Down by them . Really well done , 5/5 . |
by Blissful
Sorry my comment is comming a little late. I've had a lot of things come up but now I finally have some time on my hands. :] |
by Jade
So so beautiful!! |
by Rachel RTVW
I think you did an excellent job on this song. Songs don't have to rhyme and are often laiden with words or phrases deemed cliche, people do it all the time and frankly, I think it makes the rhythm of the piece more catchy and something many people can relate to, especially the many if not all of us who have experienced heartbreak at one time or another. This would sound great as a pop song/ Kelly Clarkson type....nice job! |
Its a pleasure to read your work as you simply surprises me everytime. I really find your work very unique, excellent choice of words and the way your express...its outstanding. |