cool poem my friend, it ryhmed very well, had a good rythem, and was a great story.

I loved it.. it was really good.

And there will always be another day, and there will always be another chance.
There will always be another possibility, for our hopelessly hopeless romance.

i disagree though.. there may not be another day there may not be another chance and there may not be another possibility for your so called "hopelessly hopelss romace"!!!

What if you or her died today? I always say TAKE THE CHANCE WHEN YOU THINK OF IT!!! hehe.. well done though i loved your poem

Good poem! In the first stanza, you don't need a comma after hopelessly, as it is an adverb describing how hopeless your romance is. On the second stanza, I don't really feel a comma is necessary before the first "but", it just seems to disrupt the rhythm of the poem. The second "but" in the same stanza adds a reptition that doesn't seem very intentional. In fact, I think a lot of the commas in your poem just make it more difficult for the reader to maintain a rhythm. I think the content is really great, but maybe you should consider writing it as if you were speaking out loud, that way it will flow more naturally.