Dear Johnny

by LizMarie R0QZ   Mar 19, 2009


Dear Johnny,

While writing this for you, I do not know how to say this. Here it goes, I really like you Johnny,hard for me to say it. The only way is through my poetry, I guess. Anyways, I know you don't like me like I do you. Since the first time I saw you in fifth grade I had a crush on you. I mean, it's like I have been heartbroken ever since.

The day I first saw you was like dying and going to heaven. I knew that you were someone down to earth and that you were someone with decency and manners. Unlike others with their pants on their knees. (JK) I have developed a lot of feelings for you over the years and I really think you are someone I can confide in. But I get it.

I don't know if you like me or not but as for now, my feelings for you are written in a poem. I just thought I needed to tell you in the only way I could--in the poetry world--where no one can tell me how to feel or what to do. But, if you ever do get a chance to read this poem, I know my feelings for you will never change and I hope you get that, too.

PS--You are really someone to be around and anyone that doesn't get that just doesn't get you.

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  • 15 years ago

    by PygmyPuff

    Ok, its an awesome start, but it needs work. I love the title, and how its like a letter, however its not a poem.
    1. Don't mention "poem" in a poem... its tacky.
    2. Its more of a rant, like a letter, than a poem. You can fix that in a few ways (I had this same problem)
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    You need to form a structure. There are so many types of poems, you dont need couplets or quad, or 6 like mine. It doesnt need to rhyme, or have many poetic provisions (such as alliteration, or metaphors) although I believe a good metaphor can make an entire poem.
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    I was also suggested to make it more active. I'm not sure if you know what that means, but that means removing personal pronouns such as I, me, you, etc. I realised that that is amazing, and it totally makes the poem soo mcuh better. It also challeneges the writer to find a backdoor to saying what is wanted to say.

    Add a structure, make it active, less of a rant, and add some metaphors (love them!) and it will be a truly awesome poem

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