I loved it! the way you described how she struggled as her life was ending was so incredible. the way you ryhmed and rithymed was impecible. this is truly a beautiful piece of writing! 5/5

AMAZING! This is a much better poem than "september"-something.. It has good flow and great rhymes. And once again I'm really sorry about your loss. I felt chills go through my body while reading this poem! Great job! 5/5

That was fantastically written. The emotion is right on point and the scenes are vivid. The flow was great.

Beautifully written. emotions filled my heart as i read this. im sorry for your loss hun.
hope you're doing ok now.
5/5

-Scarlett Ann