by EclipsesChick Mar 25, 2009
category :
Fun, humor /
about life
She heard the scream across the hall while climbing into bed. She stopped, confused, while her blood infused, did she hear it in her head? Heart pounding in her veins she turned the covers down, while thoughts of the scream she thought she heard made her slightly frown. |
Great write, very suspenseful at first with good vivid descriptions that make the reader captivated and entranced. Rhyming was excellent and I loved how you set the reader up for something horrible and bad, but the ending was hilarious, absolutely perfect! Nice job, this was such a joy to read, keep up the awesome work! |