Murderous Minds

An old diary lay open to the world,
exposing secrets, lies; truths unknown.
A red checkered cover fades in the dark,
flaws in the needlework clearly unseen.

*Wow what a power opening. I love the attention to detail. I feel like I'm looking at this diary with you. My favorite line was the last line. The way you worded it was just perfect to me :) *

Two pearl earring shine upon a wooden bench,

*I think you need an "s" in earring.*
resting among a child's blanket; moths invading.
The dog collar that rests in the webbed corner
shows that they left in an unexpected hurry.

*Flawless...this was simply flawless. You describe the scene so well. I feel like I'm looking at a painting because you let me know where everything is, the color, the shape everything and that really adds a great effect to your poem.*

A small copper kettle, tipped over on the stove,
water stains gathering around it's lonely base.
Murderous minds encased in this chaotic mess,
souls never to be returned, never to know.

*I love this poem Krista. It was so simple and brillant at the same time....my new favorite. I have no complaints on changes. Your best I think. Great work hun :) Nik*

Alliteration in the title, I loved it!

"An old diary lay open to the world,
exposing secrets, lies; truths unknown."
`Strong beginning, exposing was powerful.. good job ;]

"Two pearl earring shine upon a wooden bench,"
`Earring should be earrings
`Secondly, I think shine is too simple here.. try something else :]

"resting among a child's blanket; moths invading."
`Disturbing imagery.. haha, invading makes my skin crawl.. esp when talking about nasty creatures such as moths.

"Murderous minds encased in this chaotic mess,
souls never to be returned, never to know."
`Sounds like quite the mystery!

Well done, interesting way of incorporating all these objects into one poem.

I liked that it was a longer poem that what you normally write.

5/5.