Comments : The fear of you

  • 15 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    When i am feeling low and sad and blue
    I sit alone and think of you.

    (good start, alot of imagery)

    And hoping you will come near
    And knowing that you cannot be here

    (things get sad here, but still good)

    Wanting to hope what i feel is true
    Wishing that our time together never flew

    (Beautiful)

    Desiring my mind to finally clear
    Contented least with getting rid of all this fear

    (good diction here)

    Yet i thought i still had a clue
    Suddenly i realized i never really knew

    Then all the words You've said to me i can finally hear
    Like, trying to make me smile, it makes me tear

    For remembering all the good times we've shared
    That then i remembered you've always cared

    This is a really good poem,. you had a lot of good elements. keep it up. Shanik

  • 13 years ago

    by Liliana

    This is really sweet, love it 5/5