Excellent opening, I'm actually in awe of this piece haha. Haven't got much to say about it other than it's beautiful:

'but sneering at imagery flaws
with a certain hostility'

Haven't we all? I know I have, I'm actually pretty unsuccessful with coherent imagery, and I loved the assonance there, it parallelled the two meanings together. I tried to get a message like this across in a recent poem, but nowhere near as well as this.

'perfection will always be..........over there'

Quite possibly the best and most simple image I've come across in a long while. Looks to me like you're 'over there', a good few 10 paces ahead of us amateur writers. :)

'So I succumb to humility
and adore the cracks
my heart so carefully construed
with her bare hands

yes, falws and all '

I hope the typo is intentional, I love it. The idea of embracing our work, regardless of how 'unpolished' it is. How dirtied it may be, it's pure because it came from us, and perhaps perfection is too abstract. Perceptions of perfection differ from person to person. It's amazing that it's got so little views. Wow.

I didn't expect this.
Probably the best poem I've read in a long, long time. Well done.

Melissa I love the uniqueness of this write ....

then suddenly, quite unexpectedly
it bloomed in me,
perfection will always be..........over there
just ten spaces away
from pen's reach
^^^
Loved this part !

yes, falws and all
^^^
brilliant ending .... loved it ....

As always your write just amazes me. Its
reality in all its glory! I really liked this
part:

then suddenly, quite unexpectedly
it bloomed in me,
perfection will always be..........over there
just ten spaces away
from pen's reach

Keep pening..take care

Totally love the idea of this piece.
I surely had to read it over and over again to understand it quite well.
I really liked the last part. and I love how you ended it with the "flaw".
very original :)

Write on

Wow this was really interesting and unique, if I'm correct you were trying to make this a big metaphor in which somehow incorported the idea of writing? This poem makes the reader think and forces them to read it over and over again because its really unique and interesting and open for interpretation.

5/5.
Temps [beyond a poets mind]

It's official - You OWN this contest Melissa. Congrats on yet another win on a great poem... fix the word "flaws" though :-D

It's official - You OWN this contest Melissa. Congrats on yet another win on a great poem... fix the word "flaws" though :-D

Duh - how stupid of me - Not only did I post twice, but the "fawls" is intentional

So true they are never done right to their maker .

<3 <3 <3 <3 <3

--- MKKK