by BREEawNUHH Mar 28, 2009
category :
Life, society /
other
*Meh. I know, it could be better, but I wasn't really going for something amazing. Also, this has nothing to do with my RL, so don't tell me you're sorry and you know how it feels to be compared to your sisters/brothers.* |
by The Queen
I agree that it is a powerful poem and it does leave a heavy impression on you but, I think if you added more metaphors to show the reader what had happened or what you feeling, your work would be so much more better just a thought. Nevertheless, I could relate such sorrow and pain. Very well written with good flow. |