Still Wondering Why

Interesting write... but I think there a few things yOu need tO lOok at...

``Cutting myself for no reason/not good for health?
--> I didn't get 'not good for health'. Somehow it doesn't fit there. Maybe it should be removed.

``Loosing my way.
Will I ever find it again/no one can tell
--> LOsing my way.
Here no one can tell fits very well.

``I'm left numb
I fear having to see someone I know
That includes people I don't know not just some
As I fade away as the winds blow.
--> I didn't understand the 3rd line.
In the 4th, As is repeated. I think it should be 'I fade away as the winds blow'.

``I'm a illusion
--> I'm aN illusion.

``I can't stay in my sleep
Or else I will be tortured
As into death I seep
Even more.
--> Even more somehow doesn't fit the flow here.. Maybe you should change it..?

`` will now stop time
Just to see if anyone is even caring
To read the worlds rhyme
As the thought of love and happiness are tearing

Now wondering whats left in this world
And why I even now still try
I'm just left almost dead on the floor in a curl
Still wondering why.
--> Perfect ending. I love these last two paras.

GoOd wOrk! :)
4/5!

Apathetic, Hm, I liked it, I prefered the other one I read, but still I like this one, but it didn't capture me as much. Sorry. Still 5/5 though. (The other oen was 6/6).

Wow, another great poem. i can relate to what your saying. thanks for the comment. Shanik