Break the Silence, Break Yourself

by Trinity Lee   Mar 29, 2009


Nothing breaks the silence
Sombre but never sober I lie
The floor meets my face again
My soul longs for the life

Lets hide from ourselves today
So we never confront what we fear
Near life and death experiences
Never there but always near

The clogs in the clock move on
Striking up the band in time
The familiar comforting approach
Of what was never yours or mine

Breath glistening in the midnight air
A solitary figure sits alone
Nobody around but the vultures
The best of everything he's known

Shards of glass pierce my side
As the floor meets my face again
I strive for what was never mine
While the clock counts the end

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  • 14 years ago

    by Britania

    Wow, that is really profound! That is very close to the life I live.
    Very good job, it is so powerful.

  • 15 years ago

    by No Need For A Name

    I rather enjoyed this poem. The flow seemed off to me in certain places, but it may have just been the way in which I interpreted it. I fould it quite powerful and interesting. Thank you

    Peace and prosperity,

    (RKD)

  • 15 years ago

    by No Need For A Name

    I ratehr enjoyed this poem. The flow seemed off to me in certain places, but it may have just been the way in which I interpreted it. I fould it quite powerful and interesting. Thank you

    Peace and prosperity,

    (RKD)

  • 15 years ago

    by Darien

    I must say, this is quite an interesting poem, after reading the previous poem, this is a huge step up. I didn't bother commenting on the poem, because my opinions were mine alone, and probably wouldn't have been a good critique.

    Anyways, this was a really well thought out poem. You had a lot of vivid imagery in your piece. The rhymes were very creative, and good, except for the last one. I always find the word 'again' hard to rhyme because how I say it, doesn't rhyme with how you would. I pronounce it a-gain. Anyways, that's just my own opinion. Other than that it was a very moving poem, with a lot of amazingly well thought out lines.

    "Lets hide from ourselves today
    So we never confront what we fear
    Near life and death experiences
    Never there but always near"

    I really enjoyed that verse the most, it was really profound. The last line of that verse seemed very paradoxal, which created a really enigmatic vibe. Good stuff overall on this poem. I'm hoping to read more like this from you.

  • 15 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    Wow this one really made me think and the wording and flow is excellent
    5>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>.

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