If God is Dead

An interesting write to say the least, with an interesting topic that i found to be thought provoking and well written. You covered a controversial subject rather well. Well done . Grant

This is a different poem than i normally read lol, hmm i don't no where to start i thgought youd have alot more comments with people going mad at you for writing something like that.

i loved it btw its kinda humorous but with a serious subject very well portrayed.

If God is dead, and martyrs seek His role
Some cry for freedom, others for their soul

^I love the 2 stanzal here. it's a realie nice way of bein me into ur poem here. and otherz

Crying out, I needed Heaven's love
I'��ve found of nothing, except the skies above

^just fix the 2 line there it's post to be "I've" just take those diamonds out and it'll all be good =] that how i see it too. just skies and cloud n stars above us. but other have different things in there minds about this.

What is God, but an illusion
Nothing but a wonderful story, for our mind'��s intrusion

^Flow was realie good here. just once again the diamonds just fix that.

If God is dead, and we'��re all fools for thought
Breaking down history, and the lies it has brought

^wow a powerful meanin n message you have given here.

For 2,000 years now we'��ve heard the greatest story ever told
From generation to generation, the greatest lie ever sold

^flow once again was great. i would just say story. not lie just story. but thatz just me.

What is God, but a superhero in disguise
Merely a vessel, a house, the bringer of the lies

^hmm... now u made me think here. "superhero in disguise" love those words.

If God is dead, and we are doomed too soon
Find the freedom inside the fear find salvation in His doom

^i love the way you ended it hear. just fix those few diamonds here and there n it'l be find. i like it. nice job.
4/5

TaKe CaRe,
Frenchy