I loved this. everything about it was creative. your diction and syntax, your style. wow.. you have a gift. keep it up babe. Shanik

I feel the exact same way atm.. my ex fiance just did this to me.. cept she cheated on me read my new poem..

This is beautiful! Its almost like lyrics, this would be a great song. Its very unique and different from most people's writing. So another great job 5/5 :)