Sunsets Fire

"Fire from the horizon
Burns my eyes and soul
As does the body I lean on
Relinquishing control"
`Great beginning and a strong flow.. already I can see a tint of imagery in your words.

"Sunset, a citrus fruit
cut in half to share
Feel the oceans soft caress
whispers in the air"
`I loved the idea of the sunset being a citrus fruit! What a interesting metaphor, kind of also brings out the beautiful colors and imagery you get within this sunset.. beautiful oranges and yellows. Gorgeously written.. and in a very unique way as well. Well done.

"daffodils touch shoulders
swaying gently to and fro
butterflies stop to kiss
evenings seductive glow"
`This stanza was overflowing with beautiful imagery.. such beautiful nature incorporated into this piece.. loved the last two lines.. they bring forth the whole "love" mood. Great word choice.

"Lying there , as morning breaks
Two lovers fast asleep
pastel sky,recalls and sighs
Sweet secrets she will keep."
`This is so romantic and beautifully written. "pastel sky, recalls and sighs" - a little bit of personification here, I liked it!

Well done, a very well penned love poem incorporating the beauty of nature as well. I think love and nature tends to go hand in hand very nicely.

Well done.

5/5.

Temps
[Beyond a Poets Mind]

Oh wow!

Another gem:) So beautifully written Deana, I hope I still have one vote left!
I could almost see the two lovers as they were lying there:)

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid

Oh Deana such a beautiful write you have penned here. Although with the hints of secrets the subject is hiding it emits the most powerful descriptions of sensual love. Fantastic Job, as always you have done a marvelous job.

Love Ya,
Kay