Comments : Wolf Love

  • 15 years ago

    by No Need For A Name

    This is not a very well written poem. The flow is off and different in every stanza, making it difficult to read. You placed inward rhymes within some stanzas which make it even more difficult. The entire concept is boring and unprovocative, and the first line of the poem is what really brings it down to an unbeliveable low. Never use the word "ok" in a poem. It is also way to long and amazingly slow in it's progression. Sorry.

    Peace and prosperity,

    (RKD)

  • 15 years ago

    by PygmyPuff

    The structure has got it all distracting. The content is nice, but some lines are diluted as you tried to force the last word for the RS. The inconsistency of line length is not only unappealing to the eyes, but also to the mind as the poem is read. I would try to condense some of the longer lines, add some depth and therefore increase the value of the poem.

    For example:
    The thoughts of wolves brings emotional daze,
    It awakes one night in the full moon phase.

    ^^see how its the same content, but deeper?