*hugs you* I'm sorry that things seem to be going so rough for you Sam :( Hope it gets better soon for you :) You did a great job writing this and I really like the flow and emotions 5/5 as always

Sammy,

Although this was written beautifully it is a very sad piece....

The word choice is awesome, I loved expressions like "cascading darkness"and "sunshine void of warmth".

I don't like to think of you being in a dark place:/

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid

Sam
What a very sad piece. Brought tears to my eyes.

Human expressions deformed
Sun shine void of warmth
Nothing comforts no more

I know this will hit the heart of many readers. That have been in this very same place in their minds.

Empty fields, misery grows
Open sores, life echoes

This is so full of dispair :(

Cascading darkness
Tormenting emotions
Suffocating agony

Sometimes the sorrow and lonliness become so great it feels if we can't breathe.

Tomorrow so far away
Pipe dreams fray
Nothing left to caress

When we have so much heartache...the days seem to strech on foreevr. Especially without our love.
Excellent Job!
Love Cindy

Title: Very unique, it lured me in instantly.. not to mention that this poem was nominated, so I'm anxious to see how great it came out. :]

"Human expressions deformed
Sun shine void of warmth
Nothing comforts no more"
`A powerful beginning.. human expressions deformed is not something ive heard before.. so hearing it worded that way was great, interesting way of using deformed to described expressions. Secondly, the second line was great.. you didnt make it dull, you made it your own.. the usage of the word void was perfect here. Last line, however.. no more is not correct.. I think you meant to say anymore instead?

"Empty fields, misery grows
Open sores, life echoes"
`Awesome job on the rhyming, and how it isnt forced.. and not using normal words that rhyme well together.. it shows that you put more effort into it than most people do when it comes to rhyming. What a somber mood youve portrayed though, really nicely done making the reader feel the emotion that seeps through your words.

"Cascading darkness
Tormenting emotions
Suffocating agony"
`Powerful word choice. I loved how the title was incorporated here.

"Tomorrow so far away
Pipe dreams fray
Nothing left to caress"
`Hmm, really unique.. and original. Pipe dream fray.. I liked the word fray here.

Strong poem nonetheless, I thought you did a nice job.

5/5.
Temps [beyond a poets mind]

A very respectable poem.

It's actually very good, except:

'Cascading darkness
Tormenting emotions
Suffocating agony'

Please, just no.

Great write my friend, after a very long time, its nice to have one coming form you.
Sad and so simply written but it has that deep impact. Great choice of words.

all the best and take care

I really liked this poem. I thought is was simple and easy to comprehend. I love the style :) Great work. Nik

Really like this. Thanks so much for sharing it. Resonated A LOT with me.