My Act

by XoXBeautifully BrokenXoX   Apr 3, 2009


I have this perfect act i put on everyday- Nobody looks close enough to see the pain through this fake smile of mine.

I have them all fooled thinking I'm fine, They don't see my scares or my cuts, They don't notice me flinch at their touch. They don't look far enough in to my eyes way past all the lies to see the pain i hide.

They see the momentary tears i hold back. The pain i carry refuses to dim even a tiny bit, I suffer all alone in the darkness everyday, Drowning in the depression nobody knows of.

And if one person just one would try to look past my facade, All the lies of mine, They could see the little girl screaming to be save...Saved from this everlasting depression.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Kimberley

    Relly good but like Deathsdarkness said it could use a little touching up. I love the poem's topic and the whole emotional pain behind it. I too loved the second stanza. It just held something in it that I can relate to.

    Wonderful poem, keep it up. 4/5. ~KM~

  • 15 years ago

    by Obscura

    Im going to be honest

    its got emotion but it seems unconstructed there is no rythem that i can feel and there are maybe 2 gramatical errors than i can see on the 3rd paragraph it should read safe.....saved and on the 2nd paragraph when you say no one sees my scares or cuts is it scars and cuts instead?

    its looks like you wrote this while you were severly depressed and you just write what you feel which is a good thing but it needs more work i have the same problem sometimes its a easy thing to do please dont think of this as me trashing you think of it as constructive critisism

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