Wow. This is intense. Honestly, i didnt feel like reading a poem that long, but when i got into it i didnt want to stop reading! this was amazing. I must say, your flow was just perfect, and your rhyme scheme was excellent. It wasnt forced, and you obviously have talent in writing. You're a skilled rhymer. I really enjoyed the read. Its a dark, and emotional poem that portrays and powerful meaning. I found that when i was reading it, you really did a great job at painting a picture of what was happening in my head. Not alot of poets can do that as well as you have. Loved this write! 5/5

Thanks so much! was a bit worried about it seeing it was the first one I'd written in so long =)

Woah..this one was awesome dude..
it's another great write. :)
the story was strong and emotional and it was almost as if you could feel what the main character was feeling.
the choice of words was great.
and just like worthless angel said, the flow was perfect and so was the rhyming, nothing seemed forced at all.

keep it up. :D