I Am Your Gun

Wow. that is fabulous. I sort kinda love it. :) 5/5. wonderful. and beautiful in a twisted way.

Well I am the pain and sorrow
The grief thats stricken you
There's blood on the tiles, but your in denial
He was too good a man
There still is true hope, but it's replaced with sorrow
As tears swell up, tears and regrets

i love the way the poem flows and i realy like this stanza

This poem had a very good flow to it. The rhyming flowed right along with it at least for me. I liked your using of a gun going to the grave. That was nice. At any rate good job.

This is a bit uniquie for me. intresting indeed.

I am your last second
The moment for your escape
But the moment is passing, and your still just standing
No fear nor prayer will do
These sparks start to fly and you wonder why
This is happening, this is happening to you

^U Always have a way of openin your poems to get the reader into it. well it does to me. nicely done indeed

I am the trigger
I am the barrel
I am your gun
I'm six feet under
I'm clean and narrow
I am your last second chance, last second chance

^wow the last second chance says a lot. u have a way with words as well.

I am the pain and sorrow
The grief thats stricken you
There's blood on the tiles, but your in denial
He was too good a man
There still is true hope, but it's replaced with sorrow
As tears swell up, tears and regrets

^this part is truly powerful. "tears and regrets" my favorite words of this part cuz they say a lot

I am the trigger
I am the barrel
I am your gun
I'm six feet under
I'm clean and narrow
I am your last second chance, last second chance
I am the hammer
I am the bullet
I am your gun
I'm here to hamper
I'm here to cull it
I am your death of innocent, death of innocent

^very imaginie yup. hammer n gun wow. to take away the pain

I'm sorry but we got
To make the call
Inform the kin
The house might fall
Into a hush
Of disbelief
As I am the gun
I am the thief

^ flow was nice. words were great like always

I am the trigger
I am the barrel
I am your gun

^like the way you ending your piece here. please do keep it up!! =]5/5

TaKe CaRe,
Frenchy

I would really like to hear this coming from you the artist. You know, In the way you meant it to be.

I really like the usage of

I am your last second chance.

That's just very poetic.

great job.