The Part Where I Cry

Love this piece. Such raw emotions you have expressed..! The flow and rhyme was absolutely flawless.. I particularly LOVED the ending.. it just really drove the whole idea/ meaning of the poem home. Well done. 5/5

Great job and who you calling boy lol

I liked this me and my boyfriend are having a really ruff time im just totally giving up and ill just let stuff roll off my back cause it doesnt matter what i do.

Thank i loved your poem your an amazing writer :]

Amazing poem! What really did it for me was the emotion you put into. The flow was on point and the rhyme scheme was perfect. One suggestion:

"This isn't the part where I cry
This is the part where I fall
Those were just words to you
I was just a game, through it all"
^^i would lose the comma. when you use it in a sentence, it's supposed to create a pause. but with this format, i think it would be a better flow without it. but it's just a suggestion.

Overall, you did a great job with this one. 5/5

Wow girly, this was a very powerful and moving piece!!!! at first when i was reading i was wondering why this was under the genre "sad" but what made this poem so effective is how it opens up all happy and positive but slowly slips into the mundane pain, the one people never see because its the pain you show when you're alone, the pain that no one else knows even exists in you because you're so busy putting up a strong front when in the mean time on the inside you're feeling absolutely heart breaking.

you're seriusly such a talented young lady and really have the potential to go far!!!! keep up the good work and I'll keep reading. wish i could give you more than 5.