I really like this! Lots of emotion! Great work! 5/5

This isn't the part where I cry
This is the part where I smile
Thinking of your voice
My heart racing miles

^^ Aaww that's a cute way to start. And I know what you mean. And I like how it doesn't begin sad or anything.

Then, I will laugh
At your witty voice
When I need some cheering up
Humor is your choice

^^ I don't really like the flow in this one. But I like thestory it tells. The rhyming is kind of off though. I think it could be fixed a little.

Next, I will think
Of how it was only you
You knew what was up
No one else had a clue

^^ Again, the flow is a little off. But the story is still ther. And you haven't wwent off topic at all. Nice job so far.

The next part of this
Is the part where I hurt
No more love from you
Here's where feelings divert

^^ Aaww this part is sad. I an feel the emoitons. And I liked how you started it. Nice first line. The rhyming again wasn't quite there.

This isn't the part where I cry
This is the part where I fall
Those were just words to you
I was just a game, through it all

^^ Wow, now this one is BANG ON lol. The rhyming is really there. And the emotions are just getting stronger.

With all this emotion
You've seen my cycle running dry
But, the one I never let you see
Is the part where I cry

^^ Wow, amazing way to end it. I love the last two lines. Especial "the part where I cry." That was perfect. The emotion was amazing. The rhymes just d=flowed and didn't seem force at all.

Wow girly, this was a very powerful and moving piece!!!! at first when i was reading i was wondering why this was under the genre "sad" but what made this poem so effective is how it opens up all happy and positive but slowly slips into the mundane pain, the one people never see because its the pain you show when you're alone, the pain that no one else knows even exists in you because you're so busy putting up a strong front when in the mean time on the inside you're feeling absolutely heart breaking.

you're seriusly such a talented young lady and really have the potential to go far!!!! keep up the good work and I'll keep reading. wish i could give you more than 5.

Amazing poem! What really did it for me was the emotion you put into. The flow was on point and the rhyme scheme was perfect. One suggestion:

"This isn't the part where I cry
This is the part where I fall
Those were just words to you
I was just a game, through it all"
^^i would lose the comma. when you use it in a sentence, it's supposed to create a pause. but with this format, i think it would be a better flow without it. but it's just a suggestion.

Overall, you did a great job with this one. 5/5

I liked this me and my boyfriend are having a really ruff time im just totally giving up and ill just let stuff roll off my back cause it doesnt matter what i do.

Thank i loved your poem your an amazing writer :]

Great job and who you calling boy lol

Love this piece. Such raw emotions you have expressed..! The flow and rhyme was absolutely flawless.. I particularly LOVED the ending.. it just really drove the whole idea/ meaning of the poem home. Well done. 5/5