Wow, I really like this. I have a feeling this will make an amazing song. Who are your favorite groups. What kind of music would your lyrics most sound like. One of my favorite artist is Smile empty soul. I also really like breaking Benjamin's, and Second hand serenade. Anyway keep up the good work. I have no dought you'll go places with your talent.

Oh and as far as your commentary on my poem "last chance"
Not a problem, to be honest with you I'm not sure about its truths as to whether we live in a pre existence before were born. I just thought it up one day, based of my knowledge of different religions. you might like my poem
"infinite nothingness" check it out. (no religious ties)

do you have solid beliefs in god and existence? just curious. On of these days I think I may write a poem about my theory's, but thats all they are is theory's.

by the way I dig that you write lyrics any of them turn to full song with music and such?

I Know I agree with the comment above me. it would make an amazing song. the same with the last poem i comment it would i just tellin.

So tell me why did God make the stars come out tonight
The man in the moon smile as I bask here within his light
The air just seems so smooth and I keep on down this road
Even though three miles back I was already home
Maybe it's to tell me to think, to think aloud

^I wouldnt have it any other way of openin your piece here. i love the first stanzal. it makes me wonder too.

I'm searching for the good times that I once had
The moments I carried, the times where we laughed
But I can't stay there, can't dwell on the past
Time to make new moments for me to reflect

^we all need new memories in our mind, sumtime the old ones kill us inside. wanting to erase them at time n times to keep holding on them tight. nice flow as well.

The man once told me to wonder in the moonlight
Well now I'm here and God does it feel right
Perfect moment down to the last star
Perfect down to the rhythm of feet and heart
And even though the wind is so cold
And this jacket does nothing to keep me warm
There is no other place, there is no other time
For me to be here, to be with night

^Wow this part has a lot to say. amazing flow. simple simple words indeed but like always u make them have a great, powerful meaning.

I'm searching for the good times that I once had
The moments I carried, the times where we laughed
But I can't stay there, can't dwell on the past
Time to make new moments for me to reflect

^yup it would make a amazing song here.

There was a time
Not long ago
In which we could hide
Yet find each other
Now here is a time
And I'm here alone
But a sigh and smile
And I'm not alone

^hmm... you made me think here. alone but yet not alone hmm... nice..

I'm searching for the good times that I once had
The moments I carried, the times where we laughed
But I can't stay there, can't dwell on the past
Time to make new moments for me to reflect

^you did an amzing job here from beginnin to end. i lubit and i wouldnt change a thing or word here. keep it up!!

TaKe CaRe,
Frenchy
5/5

Yes, just as I thought a lyricist's output not my cup of tea and I can imagine this as a song is hard to
put to music and the timing very difficult. yet I will give you a 4/5 even though it is not my cup of tea there are three people comments in front of me who like it.

Very sorry to say bnut this one lost my attention for some reason...

This is so amazing. I love it. 5/5. wow.