Amazing poem! Though the ending was not as good as i expected. Maybe you should end it by saying "she is the girl that you killed inside".. i think that would be better =) otherwise.. AMAZING!

Vry good cuz..thats really how evry gurl kinda feels inside and listen to the ending 'she is the girl that you killed inside' thats a great ending 5/5

Nice poem, i think the ending anci said is good and will fit perfectly here.

an amazing poem, if u get a chance can u read, rate, comment some of mine please

thanks

This is a really good poem.. like how its set upon someone whos right in front of you and yet do nothing to acknowledge her.. i love it.. wicked job shanik..

I thought up until the ending it was very good because we all can think back to high school and remember people that nobody ever really cared about or payed attention to. Its something that is never going to end it'll always be this way.... I think I'd have to give it a 4 just because I expected a lot more with the ending.. it is a good poem though : ] message me if you want the four and i'll vote for it..GG23

This was a good poem honestly. I think that you should try to come up with a better ending though. I still liked it.Austin

This is a brilliant poem i liked it a lot i think there was nothing wrong with the ending overall it was meaningful it had a good rythem

well done

Its good... love it :)

Oh wow. omg. i just LOVE this one. its so beautiful in a sorta heart breaking way. very wonderful.

Great write. I liked the voice and your choice of vocabulary. Nice flow and overall well written. 5/5

Oh friend this is excellent work... and full with feelings. 5/5